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Fic: Heritage, Chapter Fourteen

Title: Heritage, Chapter Fourteen
Author: NP-Complete
Rating: R for adult-ish content
Characters: OCs; historical Rose/Ten
Spoilers: Doomsday
Disclaimer: Not mine. Not even close. No money being made.

Summary: Half Time Lord, all human. In the future, one extraordinary man lives an almost entirely unremarkable life. (Almost.)

Author's Note: Thanks to everybody who commented on my previous chapters. Thanks especially to kalleah for most excellent betaing and to starxd_sparrow for the story summary.

“I’ve been thinking about this all day,” murmured John, between kisses.

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irishaithne
Apr. 9th, 2008 01:48 am (UTC)
Oooh...super good.

I could hear the Doctor in John's voice when he called Penny over to see the sunset. I love your characterization of him - he's completely his own self, but little bits of Doctorness shine through.

Poor Penny, though! I was listening to Sia's "Breathe Me" during the final scene, and whoa! was that intense. She's clearly overwhelmed and scared of drowning in her feelings for John. It would have been so easy to just say "I love you too", but it would have been hollow. I'm a wee bit afraid that if she doesn't say "I love you" before too long, things are going to get strained - John may start to worry that he's given his heart away too quickly.

Had a huge laugh on this line: “Very good, sir,” said the chief steward, in a thoroughly Jeevesian manner. I could picture Stephen Fry on that zepplin!

Brilliant stuff, really. Thank you for making my night.
np_complete
Apr. 15th, 2008 04:25 am (UTC)
Thank you for making my day with your lovely comment!

Poor Penny, though! I was listening to Sia's "Breathe Me" during the final scene, and whoa! was that intense. She's clearly overwhelmed and scared of drowning in her feelings for John. It would have been so easy to just say "I love you too", but it would have been hollow.

That's a good summary. Don't forget that she told John she loved him a few chapters ago, when they were making love. She may not have repeated it when he asked her to, but he knows he heard her say it.
irishaithne
May. 5th, 2008 01:05 am (UTC)
Don't forget that she told John she loved him a few chapters ago, when they were making love.

Duh. I had forgotten that. Silly me. Stil very intense scene!

Thank you for making my day with your lovely comment!

*Squee!* Well, glad I could help. Your updates always make my day :)
np_complete
May. 5th, 2008 01:31 am (UTC)
*Squee!* Well, glad I could help. Your updates always make my day :)

I'm pleased to be able to let you know that Chapter 15 is at a fairly advanced stage, and Chapter 16 has been started. So you should be seeing something more, soon!

Thanks for the comment. I was feeling a little isolated today, with no one responding yet to my comments of the last few days, so it was lovely to get your comment!
irishaithne
May. 28th, 2008 03:22 am (UTC)
You are so sweet, but honestly, my comments are tiny raindrops compaired to the ocean of your awesome fics.

*is trying to wait patiently for ch 16*
np_complete
May. 28th, 2008 05:13 am (UTC)
But they're very nice raindrops, very much appreciated. :)
tardislullabye
May. 11th, 2008 03:49 am (UTC)
ACK!

Okay, I only found this fic because I commented on your icon and you sent the link. I should have been in bed 2 hours ago, but I couldn't go.

This story is so... *guh*... Wow. I love John. I adore John. John is his father's son in so many ways he will never understand, even beyond the appearance.

Wow. This was brilliant.

Are you continuing it in any way?
np_complete
May. 11th, 2008 07:51 pm (UTC)
This story is so... *guh*... Wow. I love John. I adore John. John is his father's son in so many ways he will never understand, even beyond the appearance.

Wow. This was brilliant.


Wow! Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! And I'm so glad you appreciate John!

Are you continuing it in any way?

Definitely! Chapter 15 just went to beta, and Chapter 16 is in the works. I produce new chapters very slowly, as I only have the energy to really work on it on the weekends, but I definitely plan to complete the story.

Thanks again for your lovely comments!
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